tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8506921431589903878.post3598678396947350851..comments2024-03-26T04:00:37.147-07:00Comments on Dark Matters: AdagioUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8506921431589903878.post-61840824464032295242010-07-30T12:43:54.400-07:002010-07-30T12:43:54.400-07:00I love this. Your writing flows so beautifully. On...I love this. Your writing flows so beautifully. One thing I would say is that I find the penultimate paragraph a tad melodramatic. I love the sentence: 'When you whisper to me in the darkness it is prayer.' And I like there's an image of worship/religion in the paragraph and I think the individual clauses work well but all at once feels a bit much... to me sha :)<br /><br />But its just a tiny thing that doesn't mar the story at all. It's just cause its near the end (which is great cos the tone is so different from the rest of the piece) that I noticed :) <br /><br />Also, I love the way you work a fantasy feel into the piece. ' burning embers', ' quick silver burst' , its like real life magic realism.authorsoundsbetterthanwriterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07609155125543070073noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8506921431589903878.post-44754281458306336972010-07-29T10:04:35.832-07:002010-07-29T10:04:35.832-07:00Oh Congratulations, Chinelo. I'm so glad you g...Oh Congratulations, Chinelo. I'm so glad you got it published! Do you have the URL for the magazine so I can check the magazine out?Talatu-Carmenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13402484991153486289noreply@blogger.com