tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8506921431589903878.post1249947733491465315..comments2024-03-26T04:00:37.147-07:00Comments on Dark Matters: An Upcoming PublicationUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8506921431589903878.post-2095494600164441882010-07-23T08:56:13.696-07:002010-07-23T08:56:13.696-07:00Thanks, y'all!
@ Just, I fixed the typo. Thank...Thanks, y'all!<br />@ Just, I fixed the typo. Thanks for pointing that out.<br />@ Anonymous, I was going for a dreamlike pace for the story (which was its inspiration), and I didn't want to get bogged down in too much detail. I do agree this could use more work, but since it's going to print in its current form, I don't know if there's a limit to how much I can amend it. However, I will certainly try to put more emphasis on the labor scene, since it is rather significant - at least for any reprints. :)Chinelo Onwualuhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02053842578176811199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8506921431589903878.post-84269994642146546792010-07-22T09:25:05.930-07:002010-07-22T09:25:05.930-07:00Still love this story. Writing is such hard work.....Still love this story. Writing is such hard work... so good job on it and congratulations of getting it published next month.<br /><br />Last sentence of paragraph three has a typo... I think. Might be deliberate but re-read it.Justhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03974441983351736002noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8506921431589903878.post-7377694557523010152010-07-21T11:21:58.458-07:002010-07-21T11:21:58.458-07:00I agree with ANonymous on the labour and caul issu...I agree with ANonymous on the labour and caul issue...:) but otherwise (like I said on FB) this is a fantastic piece!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15810918062594654168noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8506921431589903878.post-55115008102611202022010-07-21T07:37:44.395-07:002010-07-21T07:37:44.395-07:00I really like this. It pulls you in and the descri...I really like this. It pulls you in and the description is great. I think you should draw out the labour scene more though and add some tension. It's a key part of the scene that you brush over. That he is born with a caul is symbolic but you don't really describe what this caul looks like and you don't describe the struggle of his birth, which is also symbolic... at least I think so :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8506921431589903878.post-30585411255356825572010-07-21T04:44:39.054-07:002010-07-21T04:44:39.054-07:00Nice one Chinelo. I enjoyed reading thisNice one Chinelo. I enjoyed reading thisSylva Ifedigbohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14000784472586785367noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8506921431589903878.post-56277120549278721832010-07-19T14:59:21.631-07:002010-07-19T14:59:21.631-07:00I like, the themes of love and the fantasy aspect ...I like, the themes of love and the fantasy aspect too. I feel the opening of the last paragraph "Even as I write this," spoils the mood a little. You could just use how many moons have passed.<br /><br />Lovely writing too.Mynehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07595087387069634003noreply@blogger.com